First thing you will need to do next time is to fix your song cut. Never end an AMV like that.
Also the quality of the scene at 17s from "Girl" could have been better, here the original source :
Some scenes like at 25s feels a bit weird because of the art design but that's subjective here!
You have some good scenes selections and some sequences like at 43s to 45s fit well cuz the scenes are all similar.
The scenes from the opening of Neverland at 1:15 does not fit here for me. I know you were using the scene before when she is running to match the others before and that's fine but the scene after where the hand get swallowed by darkness here just does not fit with that type of song.
Sometimes you go from one scene which has orange background color to a blue one ( or the opposite ) like at 33s or 41/42s. I wish you would use some colors corrections to blend them together.
Your strongest point is clearly your scenes selections! In the end it's a nice edit, congrats on your 9th place in Dance and I hope to see you next time again!