Hello
That's quite unique. You did a good job on the atmosphere and scene selection is really effective.
I might have wanted to see a bit more variety in visuels than the basic (but working) black and white but my main complain would rather come from the "present" part where compositing is most of the time a bit awkward, being because of the proportions or the lighting. The only one that felt really good was the one in front of all the photos imo.
But yeah, you did convey your story pretty well and I suppose it's what matters the most for this kind of video. Good luck in the ranking.