Hello,
Kinda hard video to rank because indeed, those black/brown bars and especially how they appear inside the video during some of the cam movements dragged you down. Some masks were also very hard to redeem like the one at 50s as well as some forceful color correction. I also didn't like the big blurs you made in the beginning, they felt too strong and decredibilized your cuts imo. Speaking of editing, I wish it was a bit more dynamic and flow a bit better on the second part.
At the same time, it had a good atmosphere and quite consistent work throughout the video despite being far from perfect, the effort paid off overall, so the slower pace and a bit weaker flow could be balanced by that. A good video but needed a bit more focus on staying clean imo! Keep it up!