Hello
The concept was clear but at the same time not that well narrated, as Luna said some scenes felt far off from the actual story and it was hard to actually connect the events.
Visually it's decent, texts are fine even if they stay a bit too long. Scenes transition badly between each other, you have very harsh cuts between completely different atmospheres. As for the actual editing, it felt lacking in terms of pace and scene selection, you had a lot of long and/or static scenes and that made the video feel long to watch.
It was clean individually but needed more work on chaining the scenes and more time to tell your story correctly imo. Not a bad job though, keep it up!