Hello
The video is okay, there are some details that made me tick like some big blurs and some fades that were too quick but no big mistake in that regards. However the video is very flat and raw, nothing against raw but given the slow pace, the duration and tbh the anime which is of course quite overused now, it felt like a very long video with near to 0 surprise.
And even for raw editing, I felt like the scene selection was not interesting enough, a lot of static with poor cinematographic power and a misplacement of some of the better scenes in terms of rhythm. The pace is loosely respected and some important beats are eluded.
It's not terrible, it's clean, it has a definite narration and it tells it more or less clearly but the editing part was lacking a bit too much and the duration/anime choice was calling for more personalization and surprise which we missed here. Keep it up!!