Hello!
It's not bad, the concept is kept throughout the video. I just thought the texts were a bit out of place considering the atmosphere and also the noise FX on her face could have been better implemented, it was a bit too obvious. And that might be more personal but I have seen this story countless times in AMV, to me the video didn't look very different from all the others, that might be a problem depending on who watches it.
Good job nevertheless, keep it up o/