Hello,
The video was really ambitious for an IC, you put a lot of effort into making the compositions you wanted to show and it's quite refreshing and interesting. However I don't think you had all the tools to make it work completely, it's lacking in cleanliness and most of the time we get distracted from your atmosphere by some bad masks or overlay.
In terms of raw editing, it is also a bit awkward at times, though the scene selection and atmosphere are good, the flow could have been better, some scenes feel too static and don't bring enough impact.
Quite the unique entry though, good job on this and good luck!