Hello!
The risks taken on your comp were very appreciated but you had noisy comps sometimes. On some, it looks like a bad chroma key and we see quite blurry edges appear. I'd say that overall you need to be a bit cleaner on how you implement your ideas. Another example at 46s, having only one screen masked make it look a bit out of place.
Be careful with your blurs, don't make them too intense, I think you had some like 38s, 48s and 58s that were too much.
On pace management, it was fine until 1:30 where it feels like it becomes too fast all of a sudden.
Overall it was a nice video with some good ideas but also messier parts and a bit inconsistent in pace and effort throughout the video. Good job though! Keep it up!