Hello,
I appreciated the work you did but indeed it had many masks where edges were easy to spot that made it look a bit worse. Also, your color correction was most of the time too bright or too saturated which killed a bit the excitement for the video.
Apart from that, the synch and pace were a bit off sometimes, the main focus was on the visual rather than the raw editing in this and for a dance/various video, it makes it hard to stay focused if the impacts and change of pace are not especially good.
But don't get down about it, I really think it had great moments and ideas, it just needed a bit more focus on making everything cleaner and less blinding so keep it up!!