Hello,
For the most part I agree with what Luna said. First 30 seconds looked ok but then the scenes became more and more static and/or random and that killed the mood you were setting. Overall the video looks kinda flat, I would say it needed more thoughts on scene selection, more rigor on synchs and camera management and maybe a light color correction or personalization of some sort.
No big mistake in terms of visuals or anything though, so it's already something. Keep it up!